Ishihara Machiko comments: (It is suggested in the announcement threads)

[Yukari53]

Okay,
So It is suggested if I make a comment my story, you might answer it your thoughts. 

1.  My English so it need more fluent to work right.  Can someone tell me how makes it more readable so can enjoy it?
2.  What is your thinking that boss or office girl should do next?
3.  It is so a boss can train a girl he likes to work his office so she does what he wants all a time.  She also likes him, so she wants to do it that pleases him well. 
4.  Is Machiko believeable office slave yet?
5.  Is Steve believeable master employer now?

Comments more that can help a story develop at levels that enjoy reading it to the other members this board.