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Creative Writing => Fiction => Topic started by: Serika on March 04, 2014, 12:34:17 AM

Title: Pee Prank Retaliation [teens] [scat]
Post by: Serika on March 04, 2014, 12:34:17 AM
Summary: Payback is a bitch when Christy finds herself caught short after pranking some girls from another school by peeing in their cooler. Will she make things right again with her assailant or will this be the most humiliating day of her life?

Contents: Desperation, poo desperation, wetting, pooping, laxatives, humiliation, and pee flavored Gatorade.



This one was done faster than Fire at the Mall. There is a Ghostbusters reference in it but i assure you that line was written a week before Harold Ramis passed away. T_T
Title: Re: Pee Prank Retaliation [teens] [scat]
Post by: packrat on March 12, 2014, 06:08:13 AM
That was actually pretty nice.  Revenge stories don't usually interest me, but that was a good story.  I'm surprised that you found a way to include character development for both girls as part of the desperation factor, but I am impressed.  Admittedly, I was hoping that Christy made it, but having Kimberly pay for her actions in such a perfect way was great.
Title: Re: Pee Prank Retaliation [teens] [scat]
Post by: Serika on March 14, 2014, 10:40:42 PM
Thanks Packrat. Yeah, it's not that often i give someone a truly bad end, and when i do i try to make the reader dislike her as much as possible so no one feels bad about it. If it's someone like Christy she gets better than that.