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Creative Writing => Fiction => Topic started by: anime lover on December 14, 2011, 06:09:05 PM

Title: After Practice Mischief [LOLI] [WATERSPORTS] [YURI] [TWINCEST]
Post by: anime lover on December 14, 2011, 06:09:05 PM
Twin girls still at school after hours must find a way to relieve themselves when all the bathrooms are closed...

This fic comes from a suggestions by Facestab Fred.
Title: Re: After Practice Mischief [LOLI] [WATERSPORTS] [YURI] [TWINCEST]
Post by: jumanji42 on January 10, 2012, 08:41:05 PM
damn, I like that a lot. i'd suggest more "sister time" and more desperation. add some leakage and maybe some kinda outdoor peeing and your golden. pun intended
Title: Re: After Practice Mischief [LOLI] [WATERSPORTS] [YURI] [TWINCEST]
Post by: Facestab Fred on March 27, 2012, 03:41:00 AM
who are you and how do you keep portraying everything the way I imagined it

And again...er...I don't know what to pay you in, my creative process is that of a snail. Covered with tape. In glue. Danke, good sir.
Title: Re: After Practice Mischief [LOLI] [WATERSPORTS] [YURI] [TWINCEST]
Post by: anime lover on March 27, 2012, 01:09:41 PM
your approval at the answered request is payment enough ^_^
I'm glad you like it, is there anything in particular you liked about it?
Title: Re: After Practice Mischief [LOLI] [WATERSPORTS] [YURI] [TWINCEST]
Post by: Facestab Fred on March 29, 2012, 03:38:40 AM
Mainly, a lot of stories usually don't put any kind of emotion to the act. A lot of good fics could be great if they didn't just go "gottagogottagogottagoWHOOPSACCIDENTend." Maybe it's just me, but you actually put emotional depth into it like panic or disgust, and considering how much of this kink is psychological, your fics deliver.