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Creative Writing => Fiction => Topic started by: r3 on August 28, 2009, 05:08:41 PM

Title: Performance Anxiety (A Macross/Robotech fic) (Peeing, Desperation)
Post by: r3 on August 28, 2009, 05:08:41 PM
Some people said I should write a story about two girls in a car. I decided a Macross fic would be fun to write.

I combined the two, and this is the result. I hope you enjoy it, it was good fun to write. And if the original names irk you, Ctrl-F is your friend (for reference, you'd be wanting Max and Miriya Sterling, and Lisa Hayes.)

EDIT: Thanks for reminding me - I forgot to attach the file!
Title: Re: Performance Anxiety (A Macross/Robotech fic) (Peeing, Desperation)
Post by: WeAreTheFinale on August 28, 2009, 08:21:03 PM
Soooo......Where is this fanfic?

EDIT:

Nevermind. Found it in the downloads section.
Ehhh...Decent, but overall wasn't that great. I feel that it lacks more detail on their desperation. Sorry. Nice try, though.
Title: Re: Performance Anxiety (A Macross/Robotech fic) (Peeing, Desperation)
Post by: animepee on August 30, 2009, 02:36:54 AM
it wasn't that bad, but i think it was a little to short. you should use more detail
Title: Re: Performance Anxiety (A Macross/Robotech fic) (Peeing, Desperation)
Post by: r3 on August 30, 2009, 03:34:29 AM
From these comments, it seems I can easily improve this.

Expect a better version in the near future, everyone.
Title: Re: Performance Anxiety (A Macross/Robotech fic) (Peeing, Desperation)
Post by: WeAreTheFinale on August 30, 2009, 03:13:21 PM
Aight. I'll look foward to it. Let us know when it's done.
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