"The breakdown" (movie idea/story)

[Whizard]

Hi
This is a story I wrote for a competition at bound2burst.com. They made a movie based on it, called The Breakdown.

Here it is for you to enjoy/despise.

The Breakdown

Rachael is driving home from a weekend visit to her *something sensible*. After
driving for two hours she needs to pee, but she doesn't want to use a public
bathroom and thinks she can easily hold it until she gets home. After all
there's only about an hour and a quarter left until she gets home. She drinks
the last drops from a huge bottle of water.

After driving for over three hours she is starting to become desperate. But she
figures she'll be all right since there's only a ten minute drive through a
quiet suburban area with single-family houses until she reaches her house.

She wiggles around in her car when she hear some alarming sounds from the
engine. She pulls over as the car grinds to a halt. She tries to start it again,
but it refuses to start. The most urgent matter for her now is to get to a
bathroom, so she leaves the car and starts walking home, trying to pretend she's
not about to explode any second. Unfortunately, a ten minute drive is SOO much
longer when you have to walk it and are dying to spend a penny or ten.

When Rachael turns around a corner she is held up by a reporter from the local tv
station along with a camera man, and before she can say "no" she is asked question
after question on some mysterious slamming sounds in the area at night, climate
politics and god knows whatnot. She fidgets and crosses her legs and steps back
and forth to contain herself, and repeatedly tries to explain that she's in a
hurry. After an eternity they say finally say "thank you for your time" and she
rushes off, but trips in a power cord hanging from the camera to a parked car
(the tv station's)! She almost falls over onto the pavement, but
manages to keep on her feet. In the middle of the fall she starts peeing
uncontrollably, but she does her best to stop it. She crosses her legs tightly
and jams her hands hard into her crotch. We can see a small wet patch, but she
manages to stop the flow. She flushes (pun unintentional) and becomes beet red
(is it even possible to do that on command when filming?) when she looks up and
sees the tv reporter and the still filming camera man gazing perplexed at her.

Poor Rachael hobbles away. Her bladder is aching really bad, and she opens the
button on her jeans to ease the pressure on her bladder. With tiny, cross-legged
steps she walks as fast as she can without peeing herself towards her home.

Ending 1: "Female Desperation"
Rachael finally sees her house and continues towards it. She looks around to be
sure the area is clear before she presses a finger hard against her pee hole to
hold in the flow. When she faces the front door she thinks she left her keys in
the car and jumps around without knowing what to do. Just as she has given up
she finds the keys in one of her pockets and unlocks the door.
She races to the bathroom and manages to pull down her jeans and panties just
in time. She experiences great relief and pees until her bladder is empty.

Ending 2: "Omorashi"
Rachael finally sees her house and continues towards it. She looks around to be
sure the area is clear before she presses a finger hard against her pee hole to
hold in the flow. When she faces the front door she thinks she left her keys in
the car and jumps around without knowing what to do. Just as she has given up
she finds the keys in one of her pockets and unlocks the door.
She races to the bathroom but does not manage to pull down her jeans and panties
before she has peed a whole river. The relief is enormous and she empties her
bladder into her jeans.

Ending 3: "That's What Friends are For"
Rachael finally sees her house and continues towards it. She looks around to be
sure the area is clear before she presses a finger hard against her pee hole to
hold in the flow. She reaches her driveway, but around the garden runs a hedge,
and someone is hiding behind it...
- Boooo!!!! Rachaels friend Manuela jumps out from behind the hedge and hugs
Rachael tight. Rachael looses control and pees all over. Manuela is sooo sorry,
she says before she tickles Rachael so she pees even more!

Ending 4: "When it Rains, it Pours"
Suddenly Rachael hears the sound of car approaching fast from behind her. As it
passes she is surprised to say the least!
- Hey, that's MY car! she screams and instinctively starts running after the
car, but she stops after a few steps, when she notices that the dam has broke.
The pee is forcing its way out and she can do nothing to stop it. The relief
is enormous, but she doesn't want to be seen peeing her pants in public!
While the pee is running down her legs she steps into the garden of a private
house and crouches behind a hedge until her bladder has emptied. She has to walk
home in her soaked jeans.


I hope you liked it!

[qztv]

i liked this story my favorite ending was ending four when it rains it pours

[JBS05]

That was nice. I liked ending three the best.