A story I wrote some time ago

[r3]

I wrote this for what used to be called nyou.autobotiacon.com under the username sdfe (I can assure you it is me)

http://nyou.animegirldesp.org/nf/viewstory.php?sid=210&ageconsent=ok&warning=3

It's a pretty ordinary Metroid fic, about an awkward situation for our heroine.

Comments are, of course, welcome - I'm planning to write something else in the near future and would like advice.

[DubiousCharms]

This is good! I love the first-person perspective, and it was done pretty well. I'd avoid run-on sentences - there are a few in this story. But otherwise it was a great internal description of desperation. Hot, too!

[roy7]

Not bad at all, I'd really like to see more stories about Samus, especially some where she doesn't make it. Good read though, I look forward to more.

[r3]

I've just put a version of this up in the Original Content Thread and downloads area where Samus doesn't make it, as some people wanted to see this turn of events.

I hope it's OK!